Fairy: Lady Titania

[pixiepower]

Name: Lady Titania
Age: 17
Powers: The White Light of the Earth
Originally from: Cordelia, the planet where the wind gusts are just right, and everyday it’s like Spring.
Known Family: Titania’s parents were the former King and Queen of her planet. They died when she was just a toddler. But Titania still doesn’t know why. So her Lady-in-waiting (Who is now just a very close friend to her), took the responsibility to look after her and train her to be the official protector and Guardian Fairy of her planet. However the people never told her that she was a Princess and could take her rightful place. She also has a pet puppy pixie named paws, who was given to her on her birthday the same year her parents died.
Hobbies and pastimes:
Favorite music: Titania likes jazz and smooth calming music. It helps her relax and think clearly. She is also very good at opera and has a very strong voice.
Favorite foods: Titania enjoys Green Tea and Salads. She loves any food that comes from the earth and is healthy.
Bio: After the Princess was given the place as the official protector and Guardian Fairy of her planet (and a Lady to the royal court) She had begun to grow up to be a Fairy-in-training and quickly mastered her tasks. The people then suggested that she should attend The Alfea School for Fairies to master herself and her powers. The first year went well as she quickly made friends and did well in classes. Now she waits to return for her second year, but yearns to return home, but most importantly wants to discover her past.

Titania is a very mature yet playful girl. She knows how to act and always goes about with an act of poise, but when with friends she can get a little wild and adventurous. She is also very caring towards her friends and treats them with kindness and respect. She has a strong love for animals and other living things.

In her spare time, Titania enjoys to talk walks around unknown places such as the woods and forests. She loves to heal people and wants to become a herbalist. Her best subject is potions and manners, but she wants to get better at metamorphosis.

And in the Interview:
Who do you want to play?: Lady Titania
Why?: I have always dreamed of playing her ever since I thought of her in my little wild mind.
Have you ever RP before? Where?: oh yes, many other sites on boards like this one, but a bit more elaborate.
How many times would you say you should post a day?: well it depends, I can try once or twice a day.
Do you mean to stick with this site (in other words, will you NOT quit after a month or two?): Of course! If I’m accepted and I fit in well.
Please write a sample post for the character you want below:

Titania looked out the window of her dorm. It was Spring break, and she was all alone. She longed to go back to her home planet, but they simply didn’t want her. They told her she was not to come back until she was a full-fledged fairy. “It’s not fair Paw’s is it?” She spoke to her puppy pixie. The only family she had. “I feel like I’m trapped here, and will never be able to return home, ever!” Titania felt like bursting into tears. Her family was gone, and she was practically banned from her own planet. “I don’t even know who I really am!” she continued to whimper to her puppy. “I don’t even know where I belong anymore.” She sobbed. Her puppy looked at her and barked. She then ran up to the window and stared at the flowers.
“Well, I suppose Alfea can be my new home for now…” She thought. “After all, it’s where I’m going to be for a long time!”

[pixiepower]

oops! I forgot Hobbies! Here's some of it since I stated most of it in her bio somewhere

Hobbies and pastimes: Titania loves to sing and dance in the forest. She also likes to go swimming and loves to dance(Particularly ballet) *More info in Bio*

[tashii]

Couple of questions for you,

1. If she's from Cordelia then why are her powers the White light of the earth?

2. Earth is a non magic realm and for the most part people don't know about it, so my question is how is Titania getting her earth foods? Trade with Earth doesn't seem possible unless someone from her planet lives on earth and sends stuff to Cordelia??

Thank you for answering these and one of the mods should be getting to this soon

[pixiepower]

For powers of the White light of the earth, what I mean by Earth is things such as terrain and the planet's surface and such. (Like plants) and for the foods I meant stuff like lettuce and certain types of leaves that was grown on the planets surface, not like food from the planet earth.

Thank you for questions and for looking over my profile. I hope my answers make sense and will help you understand things more clearly. If they still don't, I'll be sure to modify everything.

[Chris Strongheart]

forgive me for asking this but I just want to be sure on this - basically, she's a nature fairy?

[pixiepower]

Yes, thats pretty much what I meant. Her powers have some similarities with Flora's but are a bit different.

[Rashiel]

Hey there! Since I was asked to put in my two cents, here they are...

First off, I want to start off by saying that all of my comments are meant to help you IMPROVE. Based upon your comments about how you've been wanting to play as Titania for a while, I can understand that you might be very attached to this character. Do not take these comments as a personal attack on you.

That being said, let's start with the good before getting with the bad.

It's great that you're rather detailed with the little things in this application. The more information you give, the more you give for us to work with. It's also good to know that you already have an interesting background set up as well.

That being said, you still have some ways to go as far as the application goes. Here are my main issues-

Issue 1: Powers- If you're going to do nature for powers, then just go ahead and say it. It isn't a good sign when people have to ask what your powers are because the way its listed is too confusing.

Issue 2: Personality- "Titania is a very mature yet playful girl. She knows how to act and always goes about with an act of poise, but when with friends she can get a little wild and adventurous. She is also very caring towards her friends and treats them with kindness and respect. She has a strong love for animals and other living things."

I have two things to say about this- First is that based on personality ALONE, this is no different than Flora. Seeing as we already have a more than capable Flora player for this RPG, it'd be a good idea to try to make this character less Flora-like.

The second is that there are no flaws. No one is perfect, and your character is NOT exempt from that. There's a lot of fun flaws and quirks that can be pulled from your character's history, so why not start from there. Maybe she's jealous of the current princess of her realm, or perhaps because she quickly took to her fairy training... She has a superiority complex over others. Obviously, those aren't the only options you have, merely examples. Just spice things up and throw in a flaw of some sort.

Issue 3: Motive and NPCs- This is rather minor in comparison to Issues 1 and 2, but it did catch my eye. In the writing sample, the scene has Titania being upset over being at Alfea and being unable to return home, but has her quickly come to terms with it.

• "Titania looked out the window of her dorm. It was Spring break, and she was all alone. She longed to go back to her home planet, but they simply didn’t want her. They told her she was not to come back until she was a full-fledged fairy. "
  
  First- Who exactly is 'They'? While I can only guess that it might be the court, I can't be sure.
  Second- What's the deal with "... they simply didn't want her."? It doesn't quite fit with the background. If Titania is at odds with the Court at home, why isn't it mentioned in the background?
  
  
• "The only family she had."
  
  Wait... What? Didn't you just say that her current guardian

[/i] was also her close friend[/i]? If that's the case, then why has she suddenly been forgotten? Did something happen between Titania and her guardian before she left for Alfea, and if so... Why wasn't it mentioned in the background?
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I know it may come off as nitpicky (and I admit, it probably is), but continuity is important. When an app is sent in, it is presumed that you will play that character based off the information that was provided in the app. If there isn't any continuity in your app, how can we expect you to have any continuity in the game?

All in all, there's potential, but at this point, this is not a character that I would approve of. However, make some changes and give the character further development, and you'd probably be a shoe in.

[pixiepower]

Ok, I have no problem making those changes, just as long as I have that chance and won't be guarantied to be turned down after I do.

I see I have made some things unclear that need to be fixed, which I will fix ASAP. But as for the personality, I never meant it to be like Flora. Perhaps the fact that she is somewhat sweet and mature, but I also meant for her to be tough and resentful and a bit ambitious. And as for the perfectness, I never meant to make it like that either. (So if you don't mind, may I list her strengths and weakness for her personality?)

As for the Role-play sample I'll be sure to fix that to.

Well, I can't say the changes will be here by tommorow but I'll fix them once I get the chance and I'm sure they make perfect sence.

Thank you for looking over my profile and giving me a seccond chance! You are very kind!!!! ;D

[pixiepower]

ok, here it is. Modified.

Name: Lady Titania
Age: 17
Powers: The White Light of the Earth(Basically Nature that comes from light)
Originally from: Cordelia, the planet where the wind gusts are just right, and everyday it’s like Spring.
Known Family: Titania’s parents were the former King and Queen of her planet. They died when she was just a toddler. But Titania still doesn’t know why. So her Lady-in-waiting (Who is now just a very close friend to her), took the responsibility to look after her and train her to be the official protector and Guardian Fairy of her planet. However the people never told her that she was a Princess and could take her rightful place. She also has a pet puppy pixie named paws, who was given to her on her birthday the same year her parents died.
Hobbies and pastimes:
Favorite music: Titania likes jazz and smooth calming music. It helps her relax and think clearly. She is also very good at opera and has a very strong voice.
Favorite foods: Titania enjoys Green Tea and Salads. She loves any food that comes from the earth and is healthy.
Bio: After the Princess was given the place as the official protector and Guardian Fairy of her planet (and a Lady to the royal court) She had begun to grow up to be a Fairy-in-training and quickly mastered her tasks. Since the court doesn’t seam to want her around the people of her planet suggested that she should attend The Alfea School for Fairies to master herself and her powers. The first year went well as she quickly made friends and did well in classes. Now she waits to return for her second year, but yearns to return home, but most importantly wants to discover her past.

Strengths/Positive: Titania is a very mature yet playful girl. She knows how to act and always goes about with an act of poise, but when with friends she can get a little wild and adventurous. She is also very caring towards her friends and treats them with kindness and respect. She has a strong love for animals and other living things.

Weakness/Negative: Titania can be a little ambitious. She shows a lot of resentment towards things she doesn’t like, and can seam very depressed. However she doesn’t complain a lot and keeps things to herself. Titania doesn’t seam comfortable without her friends around or without a companion and will sulk if left alone. She feels this way because she never wants to experience the feeling of being left alone ever since her parents died.

Extra: In her spare time, Titania enjoys to talk walks around unknown places such as the woods and forests. She loves to heal people and wants to become a herbalist. Her best subject is potions and manners, but she wants to get better at metamorphosis.

And in the Interview:
Who do you want to play?: Lady Titania
Why?: I have always dreamed of playing her ever since I thought of her in my little wild mind.
Have you ever RP before? Where?: oh yes, many other sites on boards like this one, but a bit more elaborate.
How many times would you say you should post a day?: well it depends, I can try once or twice a day.
Do you mean to stick with this site (in other words, will you NOT quit after a month or two?): Of course! If I’m accepted and I fit in well.
Please write a sample post for the character you want below:

Titania looked out the window of her dorm. It was Spring break, and she was all alone. She longed to go back to her home planet, but they simply didn’t want her. They told her she was not to come back until she was a full-fledged fairy. “It’s not fair Paws is it?” She spoke to her puppy pixie. The only real family she had. “I feel like I’m trapped here, and will never be able to return home, ever!” Titania felt like bursting into tears. Her family was gone, and she was practically banned from her own planet. “I don’t even know who I really am!” she continued to whimper to her puppy. “I don’t even know where I belong anymore.” She sobbed. Her puppy looked at her and barked. She then ran up to the window and stared at the flowers.
“Well, I suppose Alfea can be my new home for now…” She thought. “After all, it’s where I’m going to be for a long time!”

[Rashiel]

All right! You pass! Thanks for making the changes that were asked for without being a pain about it. <3

My only major issue with this is post formatting for your actual RP posts. Be sure to put in some sort of break where paragraphs would be. It will be easier to read that way.

You also might want to work a little on writing style, but... That's really only something that can be improved in time, and wasn't that much of an issue for me.

[pixiepower]

oh thank you! *Huggles* ok, I'll make sure to work on paragraphing. (I was never really good at that to begin with )

and I also created an account named 'Titania'